2019-03-11 14:47 供稿单位: 新航道 原创作者:章跃
[总写分组，短句] China and the US were the two leading countries in both production and consumption. [再分写具体数值，长句] As much as nearly 5,400 billion kWh of electricity were produced in China, while the consumption was roughly 5,300 billion kWh. The production in the US achieved 4,100 billion kWh, and 3,900 billion kWh were used.
In stark contrast, far less electricity was produced and used in all the other countries, [总写分组] and three countries—Russia, Germany, and the Republic of Korea—stand out. [再细分一次，挑出三个国家当main features写，总写分组，两个短句复合] [再分写具体数值，两个长句一个短句] German, ranking ninth, was the only country where production, with a shortage of roughly 55 billion kWh, [会用状语就方便构造句子] could not redeem consumption. In Russia, although the production and consumption were both far behind those of China and those of the US, they both exceeded 1,000 billion kWh. In Korea, neither production nor consumption reached 500 kWh. As for Brazil, France, Canada, India, and Japan, their production ranged from 530 billion to 940 billion kWh, and their usage of electricity ranged from 460 billion to 860 billion kWh.
Overall, between countries except for China and the US [体会一下，善用状语], electricity production varied moderately and so did electricity consumption.
Some people think that a city should remove its old buildings and replace them with modern buildings.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
先让步，讲一下我的对立面的想法 →Many people intend to remove theaged buildings for the reason that those old structures are likely to have safety issues. 然后承认一下对立面的想法的合理性 → Admittedly, those buildings, since they have been there for decades, are worn and may no longer be steady. 举例（一个句子）细化这个合理性 → For example, there may be malfunctioning circuits and pipelines. Modern buildings are therefore preferable, since they are new and do not have these problems. 再转折，在合理中发现不合理 → However, those safety hazards can be dealt with properly and, as a result, be gone. Peoplenowadays have the technology to revamp those structures and eliminate the problems. Worldwide, there are plenty of renovated old buildings, and they survive.【驳论法：通过驳斥对立面来论证自己的立场】
Old buildings deserve their places for another two key reasons. First, modern buildings – typically high-rise buildings – do not carry cultural significance, andglobally, skyscrapers look similar or almost identical. ← “比较/对比”是论证的重点 →By stark contrast, old buildings are the epitome of a city’s past and cultural characteristics. Citizens need these buildings to celebrate the cultural magnificence and brilliance of their cities. The second reason is that modern buildings, most likely business-styled, may be stressful and intimidating ← “比较/对比”是论证的重点 → while old buildings create a gentle feel. Walking among buildings in the business style, people would feel pressurized and pushed, ← “比较/对比”是论证的重点 → and they need aged buildings, which are people-friendly.