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2019年3月30日托福独立写作真题范文 | 孩子用电子设备,该限制吗??

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 3月30日托福独立写作题目:“Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

  Experts suggest that parents should limit the time children under 13 spend on electronic devices, such as computers and cell phones, except for homework.

  写作范文

  I would allow our children to use laptops and cell phones not only for academic needs but also for other purposes. I think I would otherwise be over-protective and raise children who are vulnerable anddysfunctional. [被高亮标出的词汇暗示了主体部分要讨论的内容之一] I also would notdeprive our children of the access to the greater scope of information.Nor would I divest them of the fun that our busy children need. [看来,笔者有三个理由]

  [个理由如下:]

  [习惯性的先让一小步] I certainly understand the concern of many parents that children’s lack of judgment and poor self-discipline render them vulnerable to the detriment computers and mobile phones may bring about. Certainly, there is information that children should not read, hear or see as the phone or computer would direct them to, and there is time that would be wasted if children are obsessed with the palm-sized magical gadgets and the like. [然后反驳,连用三句同一个主语的句子,强烈反驳] However, children would not necessarily grow stronger, with the protection. They may never actually grow unless the parental shield is removed. They may get too comfortable under the protection and may be unable to adapt to the cruel world they will eventually need to survive. [句子的长度递增,信息愈发具体,这是笔者的一种“笔法”] [然后,自然是举例,但是引出例子的措辞方式值得注意] My nephew sadly can well illustrate that the protection can be counterproductive . [具体例子略]

  [至此,有没有发现,笔者“如约”对应了开头段落里的vulnerable和dysfunctional]

  [第二个理由(不稀奇):回应开头段落里的

  I also would not deprive our children of the access to the greaterscope of information. [具体展开略]

  [第三个理由(也不稀奇):回应开头段落里的

  Nor would I divest them of the fun that our busy children need. 如下]

  It is also important to let our children have some slack. They certainly need it as the schoolwork is heavy and not easy. Today, the heavy load of study shows little mercy to our children and does not seem to let our young children go even before their teenage years. Given this, these devices are necessary diversions on which children browse meaningless stuff or play games and unwind. [接下来,就是例子咯,但是没有用for example / for instance引出] A 10-year-old could watch silly cartoons after long hours of doing academic tasks and get revived.

  At this point, I believe I have been clear about my opposition to the many experts who do not want our children to use computers and cellphones for purposes other than study. This is not because I am unconscious of the harm. I believe that our children are more likely to benefit from using those devices although it might not be for schoolwork.[笔者难得写这么长的结尾段落]

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