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　　万事开头难，怎么开头才不难？

　　2019/5/11

　　Some people think that older children should be required to take care of younger children. Others think that this should be done by parents or other adults.

　　Which of the two points of view do you agree with?

　　学生习作：

　　It is not uncommon that parents ask older kids to look after the younger because they think they have the responsibility and abilities to finish this work. However, people may think that it is too young for kids to carry this work. My firm conviction is that these kids can benefit from this job since it is a good way for kids to cultivate their independence.

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　　这是一个虽然有少许语言问题，但是整体中规中矩的开头（改写标题+对方观点描述+自己观点陈述）。对于大部分同学来说是一个常用的开头方式（这位同学更是每篇文章都是这样的开头），但是常用并不意味着好，甚至在托福写作中常用意味着模板，对应的往往是不出彩的分数。所以如何下笔快速开头成为了很多同学的困惑和疑难的地方。文章讲究凤头猪肚豹尾，今天我们就从头开始！

　　本文观点：由大孩子照顾小孩子

　　简易上手版:

　　Compared withthe families in which parents give the caretaking for babies, those by siblings are more salutaryeither for the kids or for the older, even for the households. I honestly believe the job should be given to the brothers or sisters.

　　既然是对比题，同学们可以开头融合进比较而不用硬凑。同时比起开头先写出具体论点，不如先模糊表达更容易展开下文。

　　背景加字版：

　　Prevalent among many households is the concept to have more babies rather than the previous only-one-child policy.The coming question is who should take the job of caring? The first choice is definitely the parents or relatives in the family.However, the solution usually fails as most of them are unavailable to do this since they usually burnout in overworked teams or have to struggle with the age-related lethargy. Under the situation, here comes the siblings who seem to be the perfect person to do the job and the reasons will be discussed.

　　写背景是一个不知道怎么开头的一种好选择，但是同学们在使用的时候一定要注意背景不要开太大，或者假大空，建议从题目信息中提取可用的内容来勾画背景。

　　逻辑进阶版：

　　When the family is filled with the crying and screaming from babies, if you were the parents, would you take the job by yourself or request your older children to do that?Althoughworrying the potential risks by unskillful young caretakers, many parents still regard it as a wonderful opportunity to foster themand I am one of those moms and dads.

　　谁说让步只能放在正文中？开头段用让步是一个常见的写作技巧，也可以让文章话语丰富起来。需要注意虽然是让步，但是不用急着反驳，先一笔带过回归主题，切入重点。

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