应对

It is better for people to be unemployed than to be employed in a job that they do not enjoy. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

这个题目

学生在开头段落写道：

It is a fact that most jobs are undesirable. However, people should not use this reason to be unemployed, which means they should be realistic.

* 这个fact有点吓人。这种论断被说成是事实，不妥。

*“people should not … , which means”这种生硬的非限定性定语从句，不妥。 

* which 引导的从句的意义和主句之间的逻辑关系不紧密，读者很可能不明白。“they should be realistic”去应对句话的话，可能在逻辑上更顺畅。

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教师修改意见：

Undesirable as many jobs may be, people should settle for a job before a better one is found.

* 改动较大，但是解决了原句中的所有问题。

* 状语部分是这个句子的重要噱头。这是一个让步状语，形式为：形容词 + as + 主语 + be动词，意思是“虽然什么怎么样”。

* settle for的意思是“将就于”。

* before的用法很巧妙。你品。

小总结：

* 对于定语从句的依赖是坏习惯。

* 有一些连词（小词）用来联系信息之间的关系，效果很好。

* 看来，还有不少的语法形式和小词的活用可学要学。