应对
An increasing number of people are changing careers during their working life. what are the reasons for this? Does it have a positive or negative development for society?
这个题目
学生的句写道： In today’s world, it is commonplace for working people to take a detour on their career path, a phenomenon to which there are multiple contributors. * 读起来蛮的句子吧？关键问题在于二： * 首先是对于It is形容词 for somebody to do something这个句型的选择。看起来没有问题呀。其实，问题出在：原句的逻辑是“to take a detour on their career path对于working people而言是常见的”。这个“对于”的概念就令人感到奇怪也不通顺。 * 针对上一点，句子的表意逻辑改成“在某个人群当中某种现象是常见的”就更合理和通顺了。于是It is commonplace that somebody does something. 或者 Doing something is a commonplace among some people. 是更好的句型。 * 第二是a phenomenon to which there are multiple contributors 作为同位语，同位于什么呢？commonplace在主句里是个形容词呀，不是个名词呀。或者，主句里也没有名次性从句呀。那么，后面怎么接同位语呢。 * 同时，用个同位语去修饰那个commonplace的意图是什么呢？既然是还想回应题目中关于原因的提问。那为什么不用一个独立的句子呢？为什么要用同位语这个相比而言“卑微”的成分哟？ * take a detour是“绕道啊”，与更换职业有啥关系呢？这个“绕道”摆在这里感觉像故意在兜弯子一样。 * 对咯，最外面的状语，in today’s world，太大了吧。 看下面 教师修改意见： It is a commonplace that people hop from one job to another, in the same or a different industry, and this phenomenon happens for a number of reasons. * 解决了分析中提及的所有问题。 小总结： * 句子的表意和逻辑是高于句子的形式的要求。简言之，内容优先于形式。
