Students aged 13-18 are taught different subjects by different teachers while younger students are taught by only one teacher all day long. Some people suggest it would benefit younger students to be taught by different teachers. Do you agree with this view? Why or why not? (2017年7月15日托福独立写作真题)
As far as I am concerned, the method proposed by some people that students aged under 12 should be taught by different teachers offers a better solution to these children’s education. [开头段直接表立场，言简意赅]
Body paragraph 1
[中心句，开门见山]→There is one major insidious[形容词，潜在的]problem with the traditional method – one teacher in charge of all the subjects.[含蓄虚拟，假设隐含在主语]→Being taught by only one teacher would initiate[及物动词，发起]boredom in children, [非限定语从句]→who are more boredom-prone[形容词，易感到无聊的] than others. From 6 to 12 years old, as children continue to grow, they are becoming increasingly interested in coming into contact with others. Different classmates of the same or opposite gender are perfect targets for these young students to mix or play with; their teacher, [同位语从句]→an adult they see throughout each school day, also ought to be someone of a novelty. [假设论证]→If all the subjects are taught by only one teacher, dislike or even aversion[可数名词，厌恶的人或东西] towards him or her would gradually arise in some students. A small proportion would simply dislike this teacher’s physical appearance while others may likely have an emotional aversion to the teacher’s teaching style.
Body paragraph 2
To address the aforementioned problem,←[不定式作目的状语从句] hiring new teachers to bring freshness to these kids would be an effective solution. ←[就上段的问题提出解决方案，中心句] 【内容详见真经6】
As is stated above, being taught by only one teacher has a serious weakness, and this problem can be addressed by letting different teachers take charge of different subjects. ←[并列句，重申观点] Apparently, these teachers can provide different specialized [及物或不及物动词，使专门化]training for different subjects, thereby laying a solid foundation for the primary education. [总结上文论点收尾]