2020年10月31日托福独立写作真题解析！

 Introduction 

The era of digital arouses the interest in popularizing science courses such as physics or mathematics. The advocators insist its pragmatism for every college student; I am, however, skeptical about such claim.

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 Body 

To begin with, unlike other levels of study, university is a setting for major research, which means students choose the direction they are willing to attach importance rather than building up fundamental academic background.【注意这里用长句做关键句提前把说理铺陈出来】It is ubiquitous for those who are good at arts to abandon the scientific subjects. I am definitely the best exemplification for this. Being the lame duck in mathematics, I chose English major as an alternative in order to get rid of advanced math course. It turned out that without the obstacle in passing math exams, I was available enough to elevate my language learning. If I were mandated to science courses even just at elementary level, there would be another story that the obscure formulas or theory can drive me anxious the whole the semester.【适当用一个具体例子说明】

Also, hardly can learning the basic concepts in science subjects be productive as desired. The compulsory education ranging from primary school to middle school has been offering students the knowledge from science. Almost all required skills are imparted when students are at their juvenile ages, which means allocating undergraduates'time for these is repetitive and a waste of time. 【先因果论证进行说理】Worse, the idea will end up with students’ rebellion, which is definitely counter-productive. In many universities, courses once becoming public required would encounter the awkward situation in which the rate of absence and sneak-off is quite high, not to mention the teaching.【采用抽象例子进行递进论证】 

True, courses of science are of great workability for the integrated quality of students. Some even underscore the implication by stating that all the students can utilize the logical thinking behind these subjects. Although not entirely groundless, it lacks sound evidence in that learning is a myriad of competence and solely arranging basic concepts in science is no way the master key.【最后用一个小让步段补充逻辑】

 Ending 

In a nutshell, practical as science courses may be, it is unreasonable to ask all university students to take them.【收尾简洁利索】